Monday, February 25, 2008

Blog 8 the death

I broke out of my nature trance to the chants and noises of jacks hunters. And in front of me lay a giant pig. They jerked and stabed at it. They even shoved a stick up its butt. I was discusted by their savagry. They jabbed the pig corpse at a steadfast rate.Blood started to trickle down. It was horrible. I could only thinvk about the coruption in jacks brain.They talked about honnereing the beast. I think they wanted to leave it some of the kill. That will be a waste. I think the beast is not real. they are so dumb. Then they left. i came out from my hiding spot. I realized they had cut the head off the pig and put it on a stick. I staired into its blank eyes. Flies Started to appear on the pigs face. I mean alot of flies. it looked like a big black ball of little flies feasting on blood. Then the pig started talking. It explained about human nature , and also how evil everyone was. Then i slowly began to notice something about human nature. I noticed how any one can do something wrong such as muder or like torturing somthing. Its like imbeded into our heads. This pig head explained everything. First i thought it was the beast then it explained how we are the beast . at first i didnt understand. Then it came to me. There is a beast in all of us. Thats human nature! I then it told me if i left this place i would not be safe. I was thinking about leaving then i felt light headed and fell asleep. I decided to go look at the "beast" because now i know thats not the beast. As i walked up the hill i saw the wings, which actually looked like a parachute. as i got closer and closer, a stinch came up to my nose. I barfed on the floor. In front of me was a dead man. I took the parachute he had on off ass proof. They had thought this was the beast all this time i started on my way down the hill to what looked and sounded like a party. I could smell cooked pig. I stumbled into a circle they were in. Then a littlun yelled out BEASTIE! I felt tremulous. The crowd turned to me and attacked me and bit my ear off then it went black, i felt like i was dead.

2 comments:

william said...

Hey langtan same with the first one put your writing in Word because you have some errors but in the end it did not make sence I felt like a was dead but I was not dead but I floated out to sea change that

Gala said...

Hey.
I really like how you said a lot of your thoughts. you made it very detailed.
I really like this part-
"Then i slowly began to notice something about human nature. I noticed how any one can do something wrong such as muder or like torturing somthing. Its like imbeded into our heads. This pig head explained everything. First i thought it was the beast then it explained how we are the beast . at first i didnt understand. Then it came to me. There is a beast in all of us. "
But at the end ,just like william said, I think you should change it.